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Quite by chance, I found this in my old NAS archive today. 'Twas to be the first chapter of a short, but that's unlikely to get written, methinks.

Lucky Moran - in pdf or docx format here. The docx is probably best, I think, as I had to use an online doc-to-pdf converter.
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I rather like it. It has a Bear Grylls quality to it.

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I had to Wiki that name - ex-SAS, eh? <chortles> Interesting...
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Spends the vast majority of his time parachuting into lethal environments then spending the next 2-3 days trying to get out again.

It's the camera men I feel sorry for.

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Sounds like the start of a mystery! Sure you're not going to finish it?

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Never say never, I suppose... but it's highly unlikely!
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It's an interesting set-up - and it certainly follows the maxim of "shovel the grief onto the hero", including the much more important addendum of having the hero extricate himself using his own skill/brains (combined with sufficient good fortune, of course). Lots of places it could go ...

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Disembodied wrote:Lots of places it could go ...
Hmm... the bin being one of 'em! It nags away at me though (I even installed a bloody word processor the other day)!
One thing: it proves to me that I simply cannot write space combat stuff... makes me wince, reading it now!
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Cody wrote:One thing: it proves to me that I simply cannot write space combat stuff
Not hugely important, really ... it's not really something that comes over terribly well in prose, and it doesn't usually advance the story much. There's surprisingly little dogfighting in any given "Biggles" story, given that he's a fighter ace and all!

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I agree, there isn't one single space battle in Chronicles of Shulth, there will be in the next book. Mainly because there is a hell of a lot of back story to get through as I desperately try and piece it all together in a plausible way.

Just as long as the story keeps on jogging along with some good old cliff hangers and mysteries your all good. Lets be honest here stories that the author thinks are a bit 'iffy' can still entertain an audience. Also some utter tripe can be insanely popular. At the end of the day write because you want to and you get a kick out of telling the story. If this story doesn't do that for you, it's best left in the box.

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