When did space action become space bar noire? Oh. Right. In part 7.
I view part 7 as either a necessary evil used to provide background for some element of the story, or as something that is contrived, cliche and unnecessary. However, it is not my story.
I remain curious to see where the story is going.
Part 7 was an attempt to explain why they were being pursued in the opening events, it wasnt a random pirate attack, they were being hunted for a reason. Im sticking with that idea but not the route taken to get there.
I thought that reason should be a "bad" decision, perhaps a dark influence from Hera's mercantile nature leading Nathan towards a more callous career. I dont think it sat right with the opening scene which is chronologically later where Nathan is not a callous killer, he's fighting in self defence. He isnt celebrating deaths.
Unfortunately Ive take the wrong path here, the easier path, once I knew where things were going, Ive tried to make the story head to that point.
I think I need to think long and hard and come to a far more natural reason both for Hera to stay with Nathan past their initial agreement and for Nathan and Hera to be in their current situation... The easy thing to do would be to rewrite the part where hera made it a temporary arrangement, but that doesnt feel right at all. It feels to me that the early introduction helps define Heras personality her motivations etc etc.
I've written myself into a corner, which I have to get out of. Im sure its essential so I wont just erase the situation. Chapter 7 in its current form will be ditched but contains a seed of some sort of what will happen in that time frame. I think it was an attempt at a necesary evil. But I think in this case the cure is worse than the disease. Of course it shouldnt even have been called part 7 really
, as its actually just an extension of part 6, each "real" chapter starts with the current time line progressing, after chapter one each one then goes to a flashback of Nathans life. I should called the part 6.1 but that wouldnt save a direly bad chapter
Overall what I like in this story is the concept of the main storyline taking up just seconds of time, literally
. The whole "main story" will be a flash in the pan. With "how they got there" being drip fed in between those few seconds. I like the format of starting with a space battle, and from then on give couple of seconds of real time, followed by a memory coming to mind for Nathan which helps fill in the characters and how they got to this situation.